Interesting, the first time me encountering Toma was with the anime and his part was at the end just before Ukyo(well you already know xD), and since I was so confused whats happening lol his ending got me real good xD weird thing is it didnt creeped me out.
same goes with me for ikki but the opposite, anime made me so confused I got it all wrong and really disliked him but after playing I really liked his route c:
I don't think you're a poor writer, I really loved the plot of the story and the characters. I think you're talented, well for me xD And please don't think like like that, we always try to bring new people into lpw and make people join our friend circle. So if you come that would be wonderful for everyone believe me!^-^