Illustration with Inking

[thorah]

Hey guys~! Newbie here~
I just saw this section and thought that maybe I could post a work of mine.

I would really like to hear opinions or criticism that would help me improve~!

Sorry in advance though... I don't have a scanner and only used a cellphone cam...

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[Will98]

Hmm... Something about your character's eyes... to me the left eye is slightly over sized??? and the right eye I believe it is how the pupil is positioned and how the light source is directed. It appears to me as your character is looking at me slightly cross-eyed.

I don't have my glasses with me at the time of this posting, so what I have just said may not be very accurate... if any of my artistic critique is accurate at all :P

 

[thorah]

Ah yeah... I though that was noticeable...

I didn't really see the wrong with the eyes until I finished inking them... Too much gap with their sizes...

I can't undo ink so there was nothing I could do...

Though the eyes are both looking to the left though. (-. _ -.)

I haven't put any light source here yet though... Must have been from the light behind me when I took it.

 

[tabemono3]

very nice (done by hand even more impressive!)

Facial expression is done nicely
Hair is good too
eye is good ( might be the camera fault! ^_^)


looking forward to see more.

 

[Ghost Kitty~]

Hmm maybe if you moved her left eye closer to the nose? And maybe the nose could cover part of the other eye since thats usually what noses do in these kinds of posts irl ;p That eyelash somehow overlapping with the nose also makes it seem a bit odd x3

 

[thorah]

Thanks for all these comments~!

@samyeung46: I'll keep that in mind~
I really mis-inked some parts. Though it seems the most affected ones are the eyes-
Ahahaha~
I'll try to do another one---